Story Time with Aliyah
Creating the story, and recording it several times has been a learning process. I believe this has been something I noticed about myself, and the way I speak. While recording you have to be conscious of how you project your voice, as well as the tone. If the story has a serious emotion you want to create a story that has that emotion in your voice. In my story I had things happen that shocked me in the moment, so my voice had to show that even though I could not be seen. I noticed while recording the story I needed to change the way I spoke, in the first recording,my voice was simple, and then I made the change giving the story more emotion. Also,changing my speech since my first recording I was talking choppy as if I am reading word for word, I needed to flow as if I am speaking with someone telling them personally about the situation. Storytelling is about going on the journey, having a peak, and the end with a resolution. When I had Ariel listen to my story, she gave advice on speaking more clearly, and projecting more on shocking parts within the story,and I rerecorded the story. My result was having emotion with a animated voice to draw the attention of the listener.
The story before:
Leaving class ecstatic for the weekend, I walk to my car and hop in ready to go. While driving out of the parking lot a woman waved me down, yelling and pointing at me. I stopped and got out of my car so fast. The woman had worry all over her face, and said “Hey it’s something dragging underneath your car”. I immediately go into panic once I look under my car because it was parts hanging that I had no idea of what it actually was, I knew it did not look good. I became frustrated because I was tired of my car having several issues back to back. I knew my dad had idea, so I take a picture of the parts hanging underneath my car, and send it to my dad. I figured he would know what to do. I call my dad since I need a way home, and he arrived. We call AAA to tow my vehicle, then we followed the tow truck to the mechanic shop. We finally get there, and the car was getting inspected. The mechanic walks over to us, and he explains the issues which were costly. Again, I go into panic because financially I can’t afford the payment. My dad knew I couldn’t afford it, but I personally didn’t want him to bail me out again. In the end we made an agreement to split the payment for less stress.
In the story I changed words that were present tense to past tense, since I was discussing something that happen in a previous year. I didn't change the whole story because the order was a great build up from beginning to end. Also, I removed extra words,and sentences that were unnecessary.In the beginning of the story I left it the same to be an attention grabbing introduction. I believe the changes to my story were helpful.
The story before:
Leaving class ecstatic for the weekend, I walk to my car and hop in ready to go. While driving out of the parking lot a woman waved me down, yelling and pointing at me. I stopped and got out of my car so fast. The woman had worry all over her face, and said “Hey it’s something dragging underneath your car”. I immediately go into panic once I look under my car because it was parts hanging that I had no idea of what it actually was, I knew it did not look good. I became frustrated because I was tired of my car having several issues back to back. I knew my dad had idea, so I take a picture of the parts hanging underneath my car, and send it to my dad. I figured he would know what to do. I call my dad since I need a way home, and he arrived. We call AAA to tow my vehicle, then we followed the tow truck to the mechanic shop. We finally get there, and the car was getting inspected. The mechanic walks over to us, and he explains the issues which were costly. Again, I go into panic because financially I can’t afford the payment. My dad knew I couldn’t afford it, but I personally didn’t want him to bail me out again. In the end we made an agreement to split the payment for less stress.
In the story I changed words that were present tense to past tense, since I was discussing something that happen in a previous year. I didn't change the whole story because the order was a great build up from beginning to end. Also, I removed extra words,and sentences that were unnecessary.In the beginning of the story I left it the same to be an attention grabbing introduction. I believe the changes to my story were helpful.
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